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Author: | thehalford [ Wed Jul 12, 2006 8:36 am ] |
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First bloody Carlton game I've seen for 2 (count them!) rounds, so I decided to do a dodgy as all shit report on it, mainly because I'm starting a correspondance Journalism course on Monday. Nothing you don't already know about the game, but I wouldn't mind some critique of my writing style either. ![]() Geelong returned to the winners list in emphatic fashion on Saturday against Carlton with a 65 point win at Telstra Dome. What was probably the Cats’ best performance since they topped the ladder at round 2 was helped in equal measure by their accurate goalkicking – of their 27 scoring shots, 23 were goals – and the Blues’ poor performance in the same regard. The win brings the Cats to a 6-8 record and keeps them in touch with the top 8 they seemed assured to reach at the start of the year. Gary Ablett Junior was the star early for Geelong, but he nearly missed the game. Ablett had run out of fuel on the way to Telstra Dome and had to hitchhike to a service station to get some fuel for his car. The Blues were wishing he hadn’t made it, as his 3 goals helped the Cats to a 13 point lead at quarter time, with an ominous scoreboard standing at Geelong 5.0.30, Carlton 2.5.17. The Blues didn’t help their cause with 4 easily gettable shots being missed. The worst of these was Andrew Carrazzo’s kick into the man on the mark from about 15 metres out. The pattern continued in the second quarter. Geelong kicked 6.1 to Carlton’s 2.2, and had 8 individual goalkickers at the half, Matthew McCarthy (playing his first game for the season) the only other multiple goalkicker for Geelong. By contrast, Blue spearhead Brendan Fevola had kicked 2 of his team’s 4 goals. Carlton’s two goals in this quarter came in quick succession, and it seemed that there may have been a spark for a comeback, but the Cats doused any such thoughts quickly. The third quarter saw an identical score for the Cats (6.1), while the Blues managed 3.3 to be 52 points down at the final change. Carlton, while earnest and willing, let their cause down with several sloppy skills and poor shots for goal, although Carrazzo made amends for his earlier blunder with a miracle shot. Hemmed in on the boundary, the young Blue somehow got his foot to the ball and squeezed it along the chalk and through the big sticks for the highlight of the day. A procession ensued in the final quarter, as the Cats seemingly rammed on goals at will while much finger pointing was done by the Blues’ defence. 4 consolation goals late in the quarter did little other than garner a smidgen of respect for Carlton, who ended up 11.11.77, some 65 points behind Geelong’s 23.4.142. Among the best for the Cats were Cameron Mooney with a strong game at Centre Half Forward, Gary Ablett Junior, who sparked the side and set the tone on the first quarter (but was somewhat shut out for the rest of the match by Andrew Walker), Joel Corey who racked up possessions at will in the midfield and Steven King in a dominant display in the ruck. The star, though, was forgotten Cat McCarthy, who finished with a career best 5 goals and gave a couple off as well. Good players were rather thin on the ground for Carlton, but of those, Kade Simpson ran hard in the middle and Andrew Carrazzo – a former Geelong rookie – worked industriously after his poor first quarter shot for goal. Cory McGrath, who was a late replacement for the injured Matthew Lappin, picked up several quality possessions but wasted his work with poor kicking for goal (0.4 for the afternoon) and Brendan Fevola, who was constantly double and triple teamed all day, finished with 4 majors to move to 54 for the season and further his lead in the race for the Coleman Medal. In the final wash up, Geelong proved themselves too classy for the hapless Blues, who languish in 15th position, only kept off the bottom by bitter rival Essendon*. Both teams would be somewhat satisfied with the result – the Cats got the win and percentage they sorely needed after the previous week’s thumping by Adelaide and Carlton got some more game time into the young players who carry the future on their shoulders – Simpson, Russell, Kennedy et al. The Cats can look forward to a testing match against Port Adelaide at Skilled Stadium in Round 15 in a match which shapes as one of the most important of the season for both clubs, while the Blues face the Bulldogs in Darwin. |
Author: | Navy Blue Horse [ Wed Jul 12, 2006 9:07 am ] |
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Do you work for the Herald Sun ![]() Good work, I think you need to be more critical of our skills ![]() |
Author: | thehalford [ Wed Jul 12, 2006 9:08 am ] |
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Navy Blue Horse wrote: Do you work for the Herald Sun
![]() ![]() Just figured it would be like last year...sure I remember reading about it somewhere. ![]() |
Author: | Navy Blue Horse [ Wed Jul 12, 2006 9:09 am ] |
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thehalford wrote: Navy Blue Horse wrote: Do you work for the Herald Sun ![]() ![]() Just figured it would be like last year...sure I remember reading about it somewhere. ![]() I thought the exact same thing until I saw Monday's paper. |
Author: | kingkerna [ Wed Jul 12, 2006 10:20 am ] |
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Quote: Both teams would be somewhat satisfied with the result
Not sure about this comment, proably wouldn't be impressed reading that part. Would like to have seen us of the phrase 'not withstanding' that always sounds intelligent! |
Author: | spuddie [ Wed Jul 12, 2006 12:09 pm ] |
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..."Carlton, while earnest and willing, let their cause down with several sloppy skills and poor shots".... I think the phrase "several sloppy skills" may be a contradiction in terms; maybe "several examples of sloppy ball handling" would be better |
Author: | GWS [ Wed Jul 12, 2006 2:40 pm ] |
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You want a career in journalism you gotta make it yours halford. Anyone can write mainstream drivel. Forget trying to sound like Rohan Connolly/Mark Robinson/insert hack's name here/etc. I understand the appeal in reading a report that could describe every game ever played and it seems that there certainly is a market for that sort of thing but I'd like to think that any aspiring young journalists out there might feel that they have something original to contribute to the form rather than simply regurgitating more of the same old tripe. Find your own voice and release your beast. As a good exercise try rewriting the above game report including the following phrases: "Having dragged myself up off the floor of the shower stall..." "Strange little glowing lights buzzed ominously around us..." "Martha, having placed her right eyeball in the glass, leaned to her left, smiled and..." "With bananas at fourteen dollars a kilogram...?" and of course the phrase that should be included in all sports reports... "We all know ferrets like the sun but..." |
Author: | billy_bongo [ Thu Jul 13, 2006 6:19 am ] |
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Some journo rules: one sentence=one paragraph aim at an under 14 reading ability (and since you're posting on a footy forum you could go even lower) where's your angle? 1st qtr, 2nd qtr doesn't cut it ignore GWS ![]() |
Author: | Wild Blue Yonder [ Thu Jul 13, 2006 9:31 am ] |
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Is crystal meth the new acid GWS? |
Author: | GWS [ Thu Jul 13, 2006 11:39 am ] |
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Having dragged myself up off the floor of the shower stall I slapped my face seven times, dressed in a rush and made my way down to the phone dome to watch the navy eat a bit of pussy. On the way into the ground the scent of tar wafted up my little twin orifices, smoke from society’s newest lepers fogged the air as their strange little glowing lights buzzed ominously around us. Once inside I made my way to the nosebleeds, sat down and was immediately assailed by an attractive woman with hair the colour of an Inuit’s armpit. “I’m Martha!†|
Author: | kernafides [ Thu Jul 13, 2006 1:37 pm ] |
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GWS do you have a job?? Having said that...a fantastic piece of work |
Author: | billy_bongo [ Thu Jul 13, 2006 8:55 pm ] |
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[quote="GWS"]Having dragged myself up off the floor of the shower stall I slapped my face seven times, dressed in a rush and made my way down to the phone dome to watch the navy eat a bit of pussy. On the way into the ground the scent of tar wafted up my little twin orifices, smoke from society’s newest lepers fogged the air as their strange little glowing lights buzzed ominously around us. Once inside I made my way to the nosebleeds, sat down and was immediately assailed by an attractive woman with hair the colour of an Inuit’s armpit. “I’m Martha!†|
Author: | JackWorrall [ Fri Jul 14, 2006 1:19 pm ] |
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Looks like Dannyboy has found a soulmate. |
Author: | GWS [ Fri Jul 14, 2006 4:42 pm ] |
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JackWorrall wrote: Looks like Dannyboy has found a soulmate.
How rude... ![]() |
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